Asian Rapini Posted:

shakespeare was from stratford of avon.

we never find out in the play where Macbeth was from, and if we did it probably wouldnt have had the write syllables anyways =P

and yeah, i only focused on the first half of the play so alot is left out.

Ok. There are some textual issues with your work, as far as things that are definitely changes you’ve made to the actual plot line of Mackers, but I wouldn’t knock you for it, since this is rather creative.

Um…we do know where Macbeth “comes from”, he is from Scotland, he’s Scottish. The life lines of the Scottish Kings is Scottish, up until Malcolm creates an “anglicizing” of the Scottish royalty after his time spent in England (when he’s in hiding.) In the annals of history, it was actually Banquo’s line that took on this tradition and incorporated into the “English Way.” So, Macbeth comes from Scotland, specifically, the area of Cawdor.

And, you’ll want to designate that it’s not Malcolm that Macbeth kills, but Duncan. Malcolm doesn’t die ever in the play, and I think you would benefit by showing the full progression of how the death after death after death increases the madness of Macbeth.

However, re-reading the poem again, I like how it ends at Macbeth’s reign (which you have stated is certainly NOT the full length of the play), there are just a few tweaks that you should put into your creativity box and stay true to what the Master has written.

TM me if you have more questions. I figure, since this in NOT AN RPG FORUM, I would actually help instead of just being bumholes like some of the above posters.

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