humblefool Posted:

Well, then I’ll make another desperate grab for attention with this one:

Here’s how it works: Every week a new concept for a forum is chosen by voting. Then, users submit data to make up the forum, which is voted on other users. At the end of the week, the forum is published and can be played for fun and profit!

Should there be a comma after “Ever week,” and should “Every” be lowercase? Hell, you could throw in a comma after “published” as well.

like to add something about this one, too.. ‘Here’s how it works: Every week a new concept for a forum is chosen by voting. Then, users submit data to make up the forum, which is voted on BY other users. At the end of the week, the forum is published and can be played for fun and profit!’

-really needs that ‘by’ in there

-edit- -you could also change it to ‘by other players’. seems to make more sense, or change both instances of ‘users’ to ‘players’

also, just to nitpick it a little more, ‘the forum is published and can be played for fun and profit!’, would be more proper as ‘the forum WILL BE published and THEN can be played for fun and profit!’