I’ll just do a run-through and make sure the grammar, spelling, punctuation, etc. is top-notch. I’m sure with so many prior editors it’ll be fine, but I can’t really contribute anything else besides my experience as a literary critic.

I’ll do that after clbum, in an hour.

I’m in.

Fixed up a lot of nagging punctuation errors, improved spacing, fleshed out character descriptions, added links to all the Apocryphal characters, improved consistency in writing style, added description of JolieNet DSL in the actual storyline as well as Excre Bot, and elaborated the beginning of the storyline further. Other random additions throughout.

I have to go to clbum now, otherwise I’d flesh out the additional character pages for the individual links. I’ll do that when I get back tonight.

Jalapeno Bootyhole Posted:

Cool! Be sure to keep our style guide in mind.

As you can see, the history of that article isn’t displaying all revisions for some reason. I can take your words for it in awarding Peen, but I’d rather wait till ET fixes it. However, that might not be till next week.

So, I’m stalling! But I think this thing can be tweaked still. The paragraphing could be more split up, for example.

...and other such nitpicks. Log in to see images!

Well, if we have more time, then I can take a nice, big stab at it within the next few days.

Fixed some spelling issues and wikified some links in the related articles and made the articles that link to your_name_299 link to <character_name>_299.

Bill_Murray_Fan_7383 Posted:

I’m in. Adding Jalapeno Bootyhole as an apocryphal; he did appear in a sTalk conversation.

Lulz and truths have been added, I’m out.

Hah, good one. That doesn’t count as part of the storyline, though. It was just a way of presenting information to a group of players, using sTalk as the medium.

Also, the NPC never claims to enjoy gay sex; that’s an accusation made by Player 1, and it is quickly rebuffed. It’s almost as if you got this wrong intentionally, for some reason.

Jalapeno Bootyhole Posted:

Hah, good one. That doesn’t count as part of the storyline, though. It was just a way of presenting information to a group of players, using sTalk as the medium.

Also, the NPC never claims to enjoy gay sex; that’s an accusation made by Player 1, and it is quickly rebuffed. It’s almost as if you got this wrong intentionally, for some reason.

No, now why would I try to do something like that? Log in to see images!

Wrote the article for Littlebilly, fixed about 10 NPC pictures that had been vandalized, fleshed out the descriptions for 5-6 of the NPCs, created an article for Herschel Jewstein.

EDIT: Added Doktor Jojo to the list of Minor Characters.

anonymoushaxor Posted:

don’t take credit for my work… u wrote almost all of it.

u didn’t create the page. generichaxor did.

generichaxor definitely wrote about 2 lines worth on littlebilly

Oh please.

You took the two lines that were already on the ForumWarz Storyline article and pasted them into the new page.

EDIT: Bah, I mistyped it after all. My bad. Just for the record though, I don’t really count your contribution as “creating a page.”

In my opinion, I would suggest making some more concrete contributions rather than whining about some a single copy-pasted line you “might not get credit for.”

I’m not going to continue this disucussion because it would end up being trolling.