I’m so, so sorry for what I’ve put you through.

Also, the author is male. Yes, really.

As constructive criticism, your comments were rather brief compared to the rest of the story. You churned this out fairly quickly, which is commendable, but you should take the time to think about your comments. If I wrote my comments as fast as you did, The ‘My Immortal’ commentary would already be finished, albeit in a poorer state. Don’t get discouraged though, I actually enjoyed it, despite this mini rant. Other people, however, will not be so forgiving. To be honest, I wasn’t really expecting my commentary to take off. I was expecting something more like this: “LOL, who is this fabulous person?” In conclusion, next time make sure most of your comments don’t consist of ‘LOL’s.

Other than that, you have potential, and I laughed several times. I just could have laughed more.

Good Luck!