Shii Posted:

I’ll just do a run-through and make sure the grammar, spelling, punctuation, etc. is top-notch. I’m sure with so many prior editors it’ll be fine, but I can’t really contribute anything else besides my experience as a literary critic.

I’ll do that after clbum, in an hour.

Cool! Be sure to keep our style guide in mind.

As you can see, the history of that article isn’t displaying all revisions for some reason. I can take your words for it in awarding Peen, but I’d rather wait till ET fixes it. However, that might not be till next week.

So, I’m stalling! But I think this thing can be tweaked still. The paragraphing could be more split up, for example.

There’s no mention of the internet provider, JolieNet, for instance, and its article could be touched up.

There are no links to the “Apocryphal Storyline” characters, although many have articles about them. (And I think these should be listed after Mains, for the record.)

I think the nature of the relationship with Shallow should be elaborated on just a bit, whether in the main article or on his character entry.

There’s no mention of Excre-Bot, who is your initial guide and has an important role in Episode 2.

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