deMonSPaWN Posted:

While you don’t want to use it every sentence, it’s not something the reader would notice. Like the word “said”. It fades into the background naturally.

Weren’t you deliberately switching over, not using his name at the end because he was no longer Dave?

oh heh. I see what you thought now. I actually didnt write the story with that intention. as far as i was concerned, what happened was what actually happened, not some psychological mind****. you could say he was no longer David because the only person who still knew him as david was himself (and the trespbumer as well), but thats opening the philosophical can of worms of what identifies us.

e – wait what are you saying? i still use his name at the end… “David laughed dully. “What do I want? I want my life back. I want my job and my house and my girl. But I’m not going to get it, am I?” and other places as well.