man-man Posted:

Breaking the 4th wall (characters directly addressing the audience/acknowledging the fact that they’re fictional) wouldn’t be a problem for me, and the main way of doing it wouldn’t even work in Fwz – the “audience” is another character. You clearly have no understanding of what I actually said.

Likely doomed attempt to keep things civil: I freely admit that I will overanalyse most things, given the chance. It’s what I do, and I don’t see it as a chore – it fills a bit of time with something approaching thought where it would otherwise be spent clicking Stumble a couple of times and realising that the internet is full of idiotic ****. But a point being nerdish doesn’t make it wrong; it’s still not good technique to include things in a work of fiction (whatever format it takes) that breaks the illusion.

I’m not saying it needs to be fixed; I can accept it as a game mechanic even if it doesn’t make good fiction, but if we all spent all day saying how awesome it was, or saying nothing at all, then we’d be doing the writer(s) a dis-service by letting them think that everything’s just fine when they could be better. Can’t improve as a writer without feedback/criticism.

That’s fair. We always appreciate criticism if it will improve the way the storyline and mythology will be perceived.

But I’m not exactly sure what the internal logic-breaking issue is anymore. Are we still talking about strangers sending you gifts for pwning forums?