Tomorrow is a new day, they say,

And the future remains untold,

So I’ve waited for the future,

And my heart has grown so cold.

Time’s silence is deafening,

As the sand continues to fall,

Matched by only your absence,

Wishing your name I could call.

These chains of destiny hold me,

While my heart shouts and I try,

To break free of this unwated fate,

With pen, paper, and tears I cry.

SlashyMcStabby Posted:

Tomorrow is a new day, they say,

And the future remains untold,

So I’ve waited for the future,

And my heart has grown so cold.

Time’s silence is deafening,

As the sand continues to fall,

Matched by only your absence,

Wishing your name I could call.

These chains of destiny hold me,

While my heart shouts and I try,

To break free of this unwated fate,

With pen, paper, and tears I cry.

This is so bad it gave me a migraine. What happened to form or meter? Using staid and boring imagery in a frankly pathetic attempt to hide the fact that this is just teenage angsty drivel? Seriously, stop. You suck. You will always suck because there is no cure for mediocrity.

Seriously, why do all you emu ****s think it’s cool to go about posting this ****? It doesn’t make you special, it tends to make you look like a clone of every other dumbbum emu ****.

Sneaky27 Posted:

This is so bad it gave me a migraine. What happened to form or meter? Using staid and boring imagery in a frankly pathetic attempt to hide the fact that this is just teenage angsty drivel? Seriously, stop. You suck. You will always suck because there is no cure for mediocrity.

Seriously, why do all you emu ****s think it’s cool to go about posting this ****? It doesn’t make you special, it tends to make you look like a clone of every other dumbbum emu ****.

...um, form and meter are tools used in poetry, they are not the entirety of poetry. I suggest you take a second look at Aristotle’s Poetics.

SlashyMcStabby Posted:

I’ll easily admit it’s probably at the top of my pile of complete and utter bull**** that I churn out.

At least you’re aware, though it makes me wonder why post it at all? Unless the idea was to lure trolls, and in that case, not bad.

Recommencer Posted:

...um, form and meter are tools used in poetry, they are not the entirety of poetry.

Yes, they are tools used in poetry. No, they are not the entirety of poetry. However, when you totally disregard these tools, what you end up creating is drivel.

This poem is crap, and admitted as such by it’s own author. My only remaining question is, why are you still defending it like it’s not complete garbage? Oh yeah, it’s because you’re an idiot. You obviously know nothing about poetry, and I suspect the same holds true for any cultured subject.

Sneaky27 Posted:

Yes, they are tools used in poetry. No, they are not the entirety of poetry. However, when you totally disregard these tools, what you end up creating is drivel.

This poem is crap, and admitted as such by it’s own author. My only remaining question is, why are you still defending it like it’s not complete garbage? Oh yeah, it’s because you’re an idiot. You obviously know nothing about poetry, and I suspect the same holds true for any cultured subject.

You may be right, but don’t you think it’s rather myopic of you to judge the entirety of the author’s ability to use tools solely on one piece of work? Open your mind for a moment.

Restocking the shelves bump.