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Obviously, it's a poem (pardon my prescription withdrawal) | |||||||
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So, yeah, I said in idc that I would take the rest of the day off and come back as soon as I was fully medicated, but I figured I’d compose my thoughts while I’m still mostly lucid and can post coherently. Unfortunately, it took the form of a somewhat trollish poem. Ignore if it ain’t your thing, otherwise just read it, dammit.
EDIT: Stupid BBcode nl typesetting ****s up on me like this with poetry so damn much… posting it in next post.
EDIT: Okay, semi-coherently. Fixed all the spelling errors. BrainpanSonata edited this message on 01/20/2009 2:38PMAre you looking to save some Flezz? Then stop on by Acid Flux’s Country Kitchen and Flea Market! Log in to see images! The Book that gives you Offense +10, Memoirs of a Hacker Hero now on sale for only And be sure to check out our Guest Book Contest! You could win up to FIFTEEN (15) BROWNIE POINTS!!! Stop by Acid Flux’s Country Kitchen and Flea Market for all of the Gear You Need! |
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Posted On: 01/20/2009 2:24PM | View BrainpanSonata's Profile | # | ||||||
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O****a IHBT
We’re all all going to hell on a rail I cry out “My brain was fuxxored!” to no avail For inertia was inertia was inertia was not a falcon for the last two days But we were so ****ing sure of ourselves as we speed-dialed the partyvan in our craze They said he ****ed up the oath but I never bothered to listen In my mind I count the dollars Inertia will ruefully be missin’ A toxx loophole Running out of con-troll Everybody bring your Nikons Everybody disavow your icons In this bumhat-filled armpit of the internet And still my fuxxored brain won’t let me forget Someday the flamewar will be over and the trolls will have won And somebody’s Nikon may be exchanged for an unregistered gun So why not wear tar and feathers as we ride our rails to hell? Everybody’s always bumhurt ‘cuz we all have trolled ourselves Are you looking to save some Flezz? Then stop on by Acid Flux’s Country Kitchen and Flea Market! Log in to see images! The Book that gives you Offense +10, Memoirs of a Hacker Hero now on sale for only And be sure to check out our Guest Book Contest! You could win up to FIFTEEN (15) BROWNIE POINTS!!! Stop by Acid Flux’s Country Kitchen and Flea Market for all of the Gear You Need! |
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Posted On: 01/20/2009 2:28PM | View BrainpanSonata's Profile | # | ||||||
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-No central, concerte imagery
-No meter, this is the biggest problem with most young people’s poetry. Someone once said writing poetry without meter is like playing tennis without a net and it’s true.
-Rhyming couplets
-No subtlety
-Some lines are extremely clunky: “And somebody’s Nikon may be exchanged for an unregistered gun” for example
Just some general tips for any other poetry you might try
/constructive criticism
BRAINPAN SONATA’S POEM IS LIKE CLAY AIKEN
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Posted On: 01/20/2009 4:34PM | View The Unknown Comi...'s Profile | # | ||||||
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BrainpanSonata Posted:
Of course it sux… I was three days off my medication contempleting things that would only have been understood had you been there at the time. But on the bright side, when I came back I found I’d won a domination medal.
So, 1) Your zinger pretty much sums it up, Comic, and 2) maybe I should skip my medicine more often. I could torture everyone with hack poetry, take three days off, and then come back and be pleasently surprised in some way or another. Log in to see images! Are you looking to save some Flezz? Then stop on by Acid Flux’s Country Kitchen and Flea Market! Log in to see images! The Book that gives you Offense +10, Memoirs of a Hacker Hero now on sale for only And be sure to check out our Guest Book Contest! You could win up to FIFTEEN (15) BROWNIE POINTS!!! Stop by Acid Flux’s Country Kitchen and Flea Market for all of the Gear You Need! |
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Posted On: 01/23/2009 12:37PM | View BrainpanSonata's Profile | # | ||||||
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